Today's poet

Evening Hes, had a look at your website after HHH posted a link to it on here, your one talented artist, some beautiful work on there, especially like the Fallen Angel:cool:

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Originally Posted by tri-mind

Pablo.

When i read Pablo's poems i feel humble,
He enunciates with such clarity while i just mumble,
His passion soul and love for his life,
Makes me want to improve be sharp as a knife.

The emotion his writing exudes time and again,
I realise i must write from the heart feel love and pain,
Such beauty in the language he chooses to use,
To have work beside him would have been an offer you couldn't refuse.

I will try to caress the words as he does in his poetry,
And hope i can be a writer like him with passion and dignity,
To be a poet with a tenth of his talent would truly be great,
Until then i shall have to work hard and wait.

By Matt Harmston.

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Hi Tri, I've got to say that I agree with HHH in that I am uncomfortable with critiquing people's original work on the thread because I love the spirit here that we can all write something and we are not being judged. I've written stuff that I feel proud of and poems that were awful but I enjoyed writing for the humour and I have also written poems because I needed to share something heartfelt and the poetry was secondary to the sentiment. The one thing I would say is that in this poem you say that Pablo makes you realise that you must write from the heart, feel love and pain...I think that you always do write from your heart and your subjects are rarely easy ones. If this poem doesn't work so well as the others, maybe it is because you are doing yourself a disservice in it?

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Originally Posted by merrylegs

Evening Hes, had a look at your website after HHH posted a link to it on here, your one talented artist, some beautiful work on there, especially like the Fallen Angel:cool:

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Hi Merry, my thinly disguised cover's blown! Thank you very much for this, it means a lot to me when people that I like enjoy my work.

Fallen Angel

Demon of the day, angel of the night
He is torn between the darkness and the light
The path he walks, he walks alone
He travels around, for which he has no home

People fear him as he passes by
He trusts no one, his life was a lie
He walks in an unbearable shame
As he remembers his unforgettable name

His bleeding heart is freezing over
As he watches the eternal night grow older
Wanting his immortal soul to end
As he watches the Northern Lights start to blend

Katherine Sessor

Just been for a late Christmas meal with friends from a gallery where I exhibit my work and occasionaly work at, the menu could have been poetry. The only downside was that the one meat eater there ordered 'locally shot saddle of hare'. Pigeon, rabbit, lamb, etc no probs but local hares...eek: That's one of my models she was eating.

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Originally Posted by merrylegs

Fallen Angel

Demon of the day, angel of the night
He is torn between the darkness and the light
The path he walks, he walks alone
He travels around, for which he has no home

People fear him as he passes by
He trusts no one, his life was a lie
He walks in an unbearable shame
As he remembers his unforgettable name

His bleeding heart is freezing over
As he watches the eternal night grow older
Wanting his immortal soul to end
As he watches the Northern Lights start to blend

Katherine Sessor

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Wow...powerful stuff!

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Originally Posted by Hes

Wow...powerful stuff!

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This one is very sad:(

A Fallen Angel


Fallen from the skies
Held here too long
Rippled with pain
Lost so much
Gained too little
Two things to live for
Nothing to help
He knows its too late
Getting ready his wings
As we release him
For his one last journey
Home

* Dedicated to my loving boyfriend, RIP xx *

Rachel Anderson

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Originally Posted by Hes

Just been for a late Christmas meal with friends from a gallery where I exhibit my work and occasionaly work at, the menu could have been poetry. The only downside was that the one meat eater there ordered 'locally shot saddle of hare'. Pigeon, rabbit, lamb, etc no probs but local hares...eek: That's one of my models she was eating.

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Hope you gave them a rabbit-punch, or a fat, hare lip;)

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Originally Posted by merrylegs

This one is very sad:(

A Fallen Angel


Fallen from the skies
Held here too long
Rippled with pain
Lost so much
Gained too little
Two things to live for
Nothing to help
He knows its too late
Getting ready his wings
As we release him
For his one last journey
Home

* Dedicated to my loving boyfriend, RIP xx *

Rachel Anderson

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Oh gosh, that is heartbreaking.:(

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Originally Posted by merrylegs

Hope you gave them a rabbit-punch, or a fat, hare lip;)

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Its an emotional rollercoaster on here Merry! One minute I'm all sad due to Fallen Angel poetry and the next I'm laughing out loud at your witty retorts.:)